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SAMPLE #1


Original Version

Doctors are busy and are often impatient with seniors who seem to take up to much time. But regardless of age everyone, is entitled to excellent medical care. To receive that care it is necessary to provide an advocate to accompany them to medical appointments, track medications, implement physician recommendations and even attend the emergency room with a senior.


Edited Version

Everyone is entitled to excellent medical care, regardless of age. However, busy doctors are often impatient with seniors who may seem to require too much attention. In order to ensure that your senior is receiving the best care possible, it is necessary to provide an advocate who can accompany them to medical appointments, track medications, implement physician recommendations and be present in the emergency room, if necessary.


SAMPLE #2

Original Version

There are myriad causes of abrasive management including when the boss feels inadequate. With an abrasive boss you can expect to find erratic behavior including: unclear expectations for your job, mixed-messages, blaming, public berating, and quite a bit of defensiveness, judgment, and expressed contempt for you, the target.


Edited Version

There are numerous explanations for abrasive management practices, which, you may be surprised to learn, are not always deliberate. If your boss’ behavior is making you feel inadequate, there is a good chance that your boss is feeling the same way. Erratic and abusive behavior, such as conflicting expectations, mixed-messages, blame, shame, judgment, defensiveness and open contempt may be a symptom of your boss’ own fear and feelings of inadequacy.






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